T1+Writing

__Friday 8th April 2011__

__WALT - write an argument using persuasive language features to convince people to visit the Bay of Plenty__.

**Success Criteria** **My writing contains an introduction, 3 key arguments and a conclusion** **I will state and restate my opinion** **I use a range of language resources and punctuation** **My paragraphs follow the S E E structure**

Hi. Do you want to go some where interesting? I think that you should come to the Bay Of Plenty. Why? I have 3 persuading reason why. Firstly, is Traveling Oversea’s to much money? Then why don’t you come to the beautiful Bay of Plenty. I think it is Awesome. Only a short trip from Auckland and a short trip from Taupo. Come on get out of your hometown and visit us. There are things for everyone such as Horse Trekking in Rotorua, Zorbing down a hill and Farms for the kids and much, much more. Come see it for yourself.

Secondly, are you sick of the traffic in your town? Well in the Bay of Plenty there is only a little traffic and you can trust our safe drivers that you won’t be late for anything here. The Bay of Plenty is not to big and its not to small.

Last but not least, is the weather in your town to hot or to cold? I feel that the Weather in Tauranga is the best type of weather in New Zealand because in Nelson its to sunny and in Wellington its to Cold and windy. So don’t you want the weather to be just right. Well here we have weather that is just right for you.

In conclusion I feel you should come to the Bay of Plenty because there are things for everybody to do including you, our traffic isn’t busy and lastly we have appropriate weather. You need to come and visit the beautiful Bay of Plenty today.

 Your introduction needs to state your three ideas T.J. Don't forget to do this always! You have restated them in your conclusion, well done. Great to see you using paragraphs and linking them also. Good use of rhetorical questions. You now need to focus on using stronger imperatives to really convince me. I also don't think your reasons are enough for me either! You are making good progress with your writing. Overall, a good effort.

Miss Crone :)